The war was over. No more yelling or angry hands. Mommy said he was gone for good this time. She bought me a box of macaroni to celebrate; called me an arteest.
This is all my fault.
Please find her, officer. I’m running out of glue.
Hide and Seek – A Microstory
Pryvate Parts 
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That last line.
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Jesus, that’s dark. Well done, Lisa.
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thanks!
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Damn, Lisa! Damn…
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🙂 Thanks
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So much. So much in a short piece. Sigh. It’s so dark yet strangely riveting.
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Thanks, Shailaja!
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You’ve demonstrated beautifully how much can be said with so few words. Really great job.
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Thank you!
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Holy cow. That ending. What a wham line.
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Thanks, Michael.
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I like the story but I’m a little confused. Is the mother reading her child’s note/diary etc or did we head hop?
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It’s the details and individual word choices that make this way bigger than its word count–“angry hands,” “arteest,” “officer.”
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No!!! Sobbing!
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I love how this story expands as you read it. I also think the punch in that last sentence lands because it is such an honest thing a kid would be worried about in that situation. Nice job, Lisa! This would be in my top 3 if it didn’t have 6 extra words in the photo.
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WHAT? The words in the photo count?? Who knew!? Also, thanks for the kind words.
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🙂 I’m not sure about other voters but they do for me. But that doesn’t take away from how strong this micro is.
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Well that smarts a bit.
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Sorry…can I give you cookies to forget that last sentence I wrote?
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I’ll never say no to cookies! But, you know. Given that I broke a rule (inadvertently) it feels icky to get votes, you know?
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If you watch Chopped on food network, maybe think of it as a time when a chef that forgets to use one of the mandatory ingredients moves on over a chef whose dish didn’t taste as good?
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